In the title “I believe my heart.” The sentence tells us the main notion, because I believe, everything will be possible, it just likes a faith that deep in mind, therefore, it is an important part in life to believe own heart, feeling, and so on. Without believing, the world is no truth, so that is why I love this song.
I believe my heart.
It believes in you.
It's telling me that what I see is completely true
This paragraph I like the most, so I show it to everyone, maybe you will like, too.
I hope you can try to hear this song it is of great worth.
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Hello, Jocelyn! This is Vicky. I also think it is a good song.
After reading, here are some advices. In the second sentence of the second paragraph, I give my revision for you. I hope that you could understand.
“In the title “I believe my heart,” the sentence tells us the main notion. I believe that everything will be possible, it just likes a faith that deep in mind. Therefore, it is an important part in life to believe your own heart, feelings, and so on. Without belief and the world without truth, that is why I love this song.”
1.There are too much commas. http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/comma.htm
2.“Because” and “therefore” shouldn’t exist in one sentence.
http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/conjunctions.htm0
3.Word choice in the last sentence, “belief” is better than “believing.” http://daer2007fall.wikispaces.com/global+errors
4.You write some Sentence Fragments. The revision is in the article written by me. http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/fragments.htm
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