I have dog called Money, he is cut and naughty. I remember clearly that day I saw him on the road, he was a dirty puppy, nobody wanted to touch him, he made people run far away. My sister picked him up and gave something drink and eats, he looked so hungry and poor, he was too little to find food by himself, therefore, we decided to adopt him, he became our family members.
Now, we take care of him with concern and love. He gradually grows up day by day, he is a smart dog, he often notices around, if something wrong he’ll bark loudly, and then rush to us try to make us understand what he wants to express.
Not only our family members but also neighbors love him. He is so popular in our village because he begs for very much pleased. However, sometimes he is pixy; he likes to play in the mud ground. After he plays in the mud ground, his body all grimy, then makes room in a mess, I’ll be mad, and scolds him. How naughty he is.
We really love him, and feel thankful that he becomes our family members; he brings us good luck, joyful and so on. Without him our life will not colorful and funny, he is God gives us a perfect present.
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Hi, I'm Katie. I think your article is pretty good, but there has a little mistake. In this sentence, "I have dog called Money,"I think you need to add an "a" will better. I think you can watch here.http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/540/01/
Hi, I'm Katie, too. "...he is cut and naughty."I guess you to write "cute", right? I hope that can let your article better.
I think you can change this sentencea little."I remember clearly that day I saw him on the road," I think you need to change to "...I saw him at the road." You can see here. http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/prepositions.htm
And I think you can let this sentence turn to two sentences." I remember clearly that day I saw him on the road, he was a dirty puppy. Nobody wanted to touch him, he made people run far away."
You can see here.
http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/run-on.htm
And here you can change to "My sister picked him up and gave something drink and foods," would be better.
http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/nouns.htm
Hi, I'm Katie, too. Here is a little mistake. "he became our family members." I think you have better to change the word "our" to "my", I think that will be mached your article. You can watch this.
http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/pronouns.htm
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