Last Monday, I woke up early in the morning, I rushed to kitchen opening refrigerator, nothing could eat, I was really hungry, and then decided to go out to buy something material. However, when I arrived supermarket, the poster on the wall read “Today official holiday” Oh! My God. I met face a big trouble, going around to find another market, but it was the same situation. Finally, I disappointedly went home.
After 8 o’clock, I entered the classroom, sitting for a long time, bur nobody came to class. Soon, I called my classmates “Why don’t you come to school?” She answered “Oh! I’m sorry I forget to tell you because of teacher’s sickness, we shouldn’t come.”
In the afternoon, when I entered the class, suddenly, I thought that I put my homework at home forgetting to bring it. I felt sad, and then I was not concentrate on class. Teacher said “What’s wrong with you?” In my mind, I thought it’s a bad day, everything was awful.
Before sleeping, I thought about the whole day’s events for a long while. I was a little bit angry because of my careless; I hoped the next day will be better, if I prepared all the things, troubles will not happen again. In the end, I slept with smile.
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Hi, I am Rachel. I found some of your mistakes. "Last Monday, I woke up early in the morning, I rushed to kitchen opening refrigerator, nothing could eat, I was really hungry, and then decided to go out to buy something material."-->"Last Monday, I woke up early in the morning. I rushed to kitchen opening refrigerator, 'but' nothing could eat. I was really hungry, and then decided to go out to buy 'some' material." The first mistake you made is Run-on Sentences. When you finish a sentence, you must have a period to end the sentence. I suggest you to go to the Run-on Sentences and read it. Here is the address: http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/run-on.htm
And the second mistake is Conjuctions. There must have a conjuction between two sentences. And when the two sentences' meaning are different, we should use "but" between the two sentences. You have to read the Conjuctions. Here is the address: http://www.cybertranslator.idv.tw/grammar/conjunctions.htm
The third mistake is the object. You can't said "something material" here, instead you should said "some matertial". Please have a look at "How to Use Adjectives and Adverbs". Here is the address: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/537/01/
The forth mistake is "met face". The two are verbs. You should choose only in a sentence.
And you spell a wrong word "bur", I think you want to spell "but".
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